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13th-Feb-2007 11:09 pm
Reborn - Yamamoto CHIBITA

raynos wrote a fascinating Bleach Chapter 262 spoiler fic here, and also said something which probably unconsciously sparked off this story - that just because one is not in favour of something happening doesn't mean one won't still write it.

What did put me in the mood to write something like this was THIS Youtube video which Niisan dearest cheerfully linked me, in the interest of breaking my brains, which features Okiayu Ryutaro (Tezuka and Byakuya's seiyuu) as Usamimi Kamen. Yes, you heard that right, a superhero in vivid pink and bunny ears. And so I figured that turnabout is fair play, and also I remember that I have owed Niisan fic since last August, and so I wrote this. In an hour.

There are two other people that also deserve blame credit for indirectly inspiring this. I suppose I shall have to thank you both in my own special way.

Takes place before Luke and Tear's Get-Out-Of-the-Fabre-Mansion Choushindou card gets played.

Warning: Spoilers for Guy's identity, House Gardios, the whole revenge thing, and I suppose indirectly the replica connection thing, too.
Wordcount: 1,107 words
Pairing: Asch/Guy, and Guy/Luke and Asch/Luke if you look reaaally hard.

On a night some time after the fall of Hod, a blond servant steals like a thief into a room where his reason for serving so long in the house of his enemy sleeps.

It is deep in the night, and all of House Fabre sleeps.

But Gailardia Galan Galudios does not.

There is no one to stop him as he makes his way over to the bed where his reason lies. All he can hear the steady beat of the heart that has waited this long to carry out its promise.

Not much longer now, Guy vowed, bitterly. The silent promise made by the last living member of House Gardios would be kept.

Moonlight spilled through the drapes, illuminating the sleeping boy. The vivid scarlet of his hair swept across the pillow and crept under his cheek. By his years, Luke wasn’t truly a child any longer, but he certainly slept like one, with his arms flung wide and sprawled across the entire bed.

So trusting, Guy thought, as he looked down on House Fabre’s only son. He reached out for the boy. It will be quick, he promised. You won’t feel a thing. It’s more mercy than your father ever showed mine.

The second his hands closed around the boy’s neck, however, Luke’s eyes snapped open. Before Guy could even make the split-second decision between going ahead with what he’d planned for years and trying again, Luke glanced at him and smiled.

It was a knowing smile, and one that made Guy’s blood run cold. But it was nothing compared to what followed next.

“Gailardia Galan Galudios,” said Luke, slowly and deliberately, drawing the name out as a swordsman would unsheathe his blade.

Guy stiffened. None but two others in the Fabre household knew that name, and the last person who should have known it was the one who had just spoken it.

“Did you really think that your presence in this household has gone unnoticed?” Luke seemed completely indifferent to Guy’s hands around his neck. “Surely it must have occurred to you that the mastermind behind the invasion of Hod would never let such a thing escape his attention?”

The knowledge of his name and the revelation that his presence in the Fabre household had never been a secret did not disturb Guy as much as the fact that Luke hadn’t stopped smiling.

“Who are you?” hissed Guy, knowing that the creature under his hands could not possibly be the Luke fon Fabre that he saw every day, the Luke that he’d taught to speak, the Luke who’d run straight into his arms when he first learned to walk.

“Who am I?” asked Luke, echoing Guy’s question. “You know my name.”

Somewhere in between the last word he spoke and Guy tensing, Luke locked his arms around Guy’s, with a strength that Guy never knew he possessed. Guy cursed himself for being caught out – he hadn’t come ready for a fight, after all – he hadn’t expected a Luke capable of giving him one. The Luke fon Fabre Guy thought he knew had learned to walk a mere four years ago, and indeed, was at times given to being clumsier than he ought to have been. But this Luke – this Luke reacted like a born fighter.

“I suggest you rethink your plans,” said Luke.

“How do you know who I am?” demanded Guy.

Luke smirked. “You give away far more than you know,” he replied. “And in return, I’ll give you this advice: ask me again when next we meet.”

“This ends tonight,” said Guy, his grip tightening around Luke’s neck.

Unbelievably, Luke laughed. “Go ahead, son of Gardios,” he said, and it shook Guy to the core to know that he meant it. “After what my family has done to yours, even I would be hard-put to deny you your revenge.” But then Luke fixed him with a gaze that left no doubt in Guy’s mind as to what he intended to do should Guy obey.

“But know this. What you do to him, you do also to me. And if you lay a hand on him, I will come for you. And I will do whatever it takes, for however long it takes, until I get to you. Surely you understand, Guy. And when I find you, what I will do to you will make you realise that what happened to your family was mercy before I am through with you.”

“You bastard,” snarled Guy, but before he could begin to fulfill his promise, Luke twisted under his hands and his hold relaxed, which was all the opening Luke needed to break Guy’s grip and free himself.

“Such language in front of a child,” Luke chided.

You’re no child,” snapped Guy, beginning to back away.

“That’s right,” Luke said, as he closed the distance between them faster than Guy thought he could move. “And don’t you ever forget it.”

This time, there is something gentle even in the strength of the hands that pin Guy’s wrists to his sides. “And this,” says Luke, with an emotion Guy cannot at first identify, “Is so that you remember this – ” And Guy cannot understand why it is that Luke has come so close, right up until the moment Luke kisses him.

It is over in a heartbeat, and then intent green eyes meet Guy’s.

“And remember me.”

Then Luke collapses into Guy’s arms, and the face that looks up from behind a sleep-tangled chaos of scarlet hair is bewildered and sleepy and belongs to the Luke that Guy knows.

“Guy?” Luke asks, and this is the voice that Guy knows, a voice demanding even when half-asleep, imperious as the Duke he will someday be. And all of a sudden the aching familiarity of the one in his arms makes Guy suddenly and ridiculously glad that he has his Luke back. “What happened?”

“N-nothing, Luke,” answers Guy, trying to force nonchalance into his reply.

“Did I have another headache?” asks Luke, as he rubs his eyes, still seemingly sleepy.

“… I think it was a nightmare,” Guy says, suddenly lighting upon the lie and eager to have Luke forget all of this, if he even remembered anything. He’s deeply relieved when Luke accepts his answer unquestioningly, and allows Guy to put him back to bed.

He watches Luke until he falls asleep, if only to reassure himself, even as his relief is mixed with deep apprehension. He is no Luke – he cannot so easily believe that lie. That was no nightmare, he knows.

No nightmare would know his name, and no nightmare could kiss like that.

raethes did absolutely gorgeous art for this here (mirror). ♥
13th-Feb-2007 03:34 pm (UTC) - xD No, Luke, it was the cheegles.
Asch/Luke if you look reaaally hard.

I looked really really hard and I found something I like. xD

....and no nightmare could kiss like that.

*laughs* I'm sitting here in my towel - only YOU could make me sit down and read this before getting dressed - and melting because it is so good. xD

It's good fic! IT IS GOOD ABYSS FIC. *happy sigh* It's been soooo long since I last saw good Abyss fic. ;)

I hope Nii-san sees this soon. :D
13th-Feb-2007 03:43 pm (UTC) - MAYBE ASCH IS MAKING ME DO IT
The idea for this story actually started out as being Asch/Luke. Apparently THIS is Asch's idea of a Valentine's.

*giggles* Thank you so much, sweetheart. You're actually more critical of fanfiction than I am, so I look forward to your opinion. ♥

Also! Sitting in a towel! Please go and dry yourself off before you catch a cold! The story can wait, you know. ;)

Heheheh. Thank you so much once again! ; )
13th-Feb-2007 03:55 pm (UTC) - I have no more Guy icons! T.T
xD I will patiently await my Asch/Luke wankage fic. Someone will write it! For now, this will definitely do. *laughs* Asch's idea of a Valentine is a little.. off. ;) Although the thought is sweet. Heh. *pats him*

LOL! If being critical means cruel, TOTALLY. ♥ I shouldn't be judging, because I know if I wrote anything it would be posted on ff.net in the THIS SUCKS catagory . ;) But honestly, a lot of what is out there... I think it isn't worth my time. :P Or yours. Or anyone's.

IT CANNOT WAIT!! Your fanfic is like LPS to me - it might be GONE if I wait too long to get my grabby hands on it. xD YOU NEVER KNOW. LJ MIGHT BE DOWN IN FIVE MINUTES! MY INTERNET COULD DIE. No, really, I just need to leave the house soon. ;)

You're being waaay too polite. xD *blinks* ... Is there anything you want? xD *offers YSI once more*
13th-Feb-2007 04:05 pm (UTC) - it's okay, you can have mine too! : ))
......... *long pause*. You know, I haven't forgotten that one. Um. Well, never say never! Until two hours ago I didn't ever think I'd write Asch/Guy.

Oh, you should see his idea of a birthday present. D<

Oh! NOW I know what must have set it off! I ran down to pick up the second volume of one of the Abyss anthologies, and there were eight 4-komas of Asch side-by-side. And this really funny Asch-and-Natalia comic (... I ship Asch/Natalia like I ship Conrad/Yuuri) that I actually liked because Asch had 1001 expressions and somersaulted into the frame. I think the positive spillover Asch happy turned into this. I want to scan you the cheegle art! But father is on the computer.

I've been reading a lot of FFXII fic last night and went stupid with happy. ♥

... NOT TRUE. You know, I think you wrote good fanfiction. If only I could encourage you to write more. >D

XD Actually you're not far wrong. I always get uncommonly nervous when I post fic, and sometimes if the nerves overcome me I put it on private. Hee! Japanese lessons! Take care and come home safe!

... you mean I'm not usually this polite? *angelic halo* XD No, I can't think of anything at the moment, really. ;) Just patience until I can send out your present. xD
13th-Feb-2007 04:18 pm (UTC) - *makes grabby hands at your icons* ;)
OF COURSE YOU HAVEN'T FORGOTTEN! xD That conversation was traumatising. *g*

HAHA! If his idea of a birthday present is anything like yours... Well, poor Asch. ;)

LOL! How did Asch having expressions (YOU NEED TO PROVE THIS TO ME BEFORE I WILL BELIEVE IT! xD) and doing somersaults inspire this? O.o

... I nearly gave in and googled Harry/Draco fanfiction a few nights ago. xD But I think I will wait for the last book to come out before getting back into it. ;) HP fanfic is the only fandom I can think of that has good fanfic to spare right now. *g* I want to get into FFXXII but I don't like the characters very much? ^^;

You know, I think you wrote good fanfiction.


Awww! :) Your fanfiction is really good though! I wish some other people would get too nervous and private their fic. *smirk*

I have patience! But need to go now. :) No Japanese, though. Just doctor's visit. ^^;
13th-Feb-2007 05:53 pm (UTC) - XDDD HOW CUTE :D [I just imagine grabby-handed little Luke]
It wasn't actually traumatising more than fascinating - I never thought anyone would want a fic like that, which is good, because I usually think no one will ever want the fics I want, and you go and show me that HMM, THERE IS MORE TO FANFIC IDEAS THAN I EVER IMAGINED. It kind of made me happy to know you wanted that. Yes, I'm so odd. xD

Hey, my birthday presents are better than his! Or so I think. xD

I SCAN THAT PART OF THE ANTHOLOGY IN SOON. XDD FOR THE CHEEGLES. ♥ I think it's just happy!spillover!Asch-feeling. xD

XDDD WHY RESIST? Just give in! I think the human mind needs good fanfiction sometimes, even if it doesn't know it needs it. I didn't know how much I wanted to read SO MUCH good writing until I started reading FFXII. (what, you mean Tenipuri doesn't have good fanfiction? OR POKEMON? ... you can start writing LPS fic! XD)

It's okay! I really did not have any feelings for the FFXII characters for the longest time, and eventually I started to like them, and when I started to play, I began to love them. I honestly do not think I can complete that game or even get halfway through, but HEY, what I've got sure is fun so far! XD

Dark Angel, remember? But don't take it away.

HEHEHEH, that's because I private most of my dreck and only post those which I think are passable. Or post when my common sense gets defeated. xD By usagi-chans.

*snug* Take care, sweetheart. I hope the visit went fine. *snug*
13th-Feb-2007 09:00 pm (UTC) - [Luke: OH LOOK, APPLES! *takes!*]

LOOK AT WHAT YOU HAVE MADE ME DO!! Just with a comment title alone! O.o I swear this is the last time I link you LPS pictures, haha. I will start acting like the 20 year old woman I am. Soon.

LOL! I am glad to know my fanfiction cravings are fascinating to you. xD That they make you happy is the strangest thing I have ever heard. *laughs* Yay? I want to know more about yours now.. They can't all be that simple and innocent. xD

Aww! xD I just meant that I would feel sorry for Asch if he ever got the insane idea of scanlating doujinshi for Luke. :) It would make all of Asch's hair fall out.

TENIPURI FANFICTION SUCKS! It is all PWP or smut. xD I like plot! POKEMON FANFICTION IS HORRIBLE AND SHOULD ALL BE BURNED! *laughter* LPS FIC WOULD BE... the tragic love story of a bunny inside a plastic package falling in love (at first sight!) with the bunny in the package next to it. THEY WILL BE SEPERATED AND NEVER SEE EACH OTHER AGAIN. T.T

IEEH! I am completely horrified at how easy you managed to find the forum, AT LEAST YOU DID NOT FIND THE FANFIC. xD My favourite character to write from the DA fandom was this EVIL guy, and by EVIL I mean EVIL! He is part of a cult where they kill their own children and keep pet snakes! xD (and I also had a thing for REPLICA femmeslash!)

SOBS! I'm sure your drecks can't be bad! T.T

I am starting to dislike doctors a lot. ^^; *doesn't want to talk about it*
13th-Feb-2007 03:49 pm (UTC)
This made me all sorts of happy. I squinted really, really hard and the magic of this lies in the last line of the fic. X3 Tee-hee~ What a wonderful thing to read before going to bed. xD
13th-Feb-2007 03:54 pm (UTC)
And to think I almost didn't leave the last line in! *laughing* Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked this! *grin*

Good night ~ And I'll see you very soon! *grin* I was just in LC today and it'll close early on the day you arrive and be closed for CNY, so it's a good thing I'll see you after? ;)
13th-Feb-2007 04:25 pm (UTC)


That was beautiful :D. I love how vivid the entire thing was.
13th-Feb-2007 04:36 pm (UTC) - SHACHOU ♥
BY JENOVA SHACHOU, I am amazed that you took the time and trouble to read this after your killer day! *snug* Thank you so much, and you would not believe how happy YOU capslocking makes me. ♥

Thank you so much! *grin* After flooring me with the quality of your stories, you saying this makes me really happy. ♥ I'm glad this worked for you! :D
13th-Feb-2007 04:14 pm (UTC)
Ahahahahaha! :D I can't express how much reading this cheered me up! Hee. And I didn't have to look hard at all, then again, I always know what to look for. *evil laugh* :3 Poor Guy, if he think he's got it bad now, just wait until Asch really gets ahold of Luke and teaches him a thing or two. Then he'll have nowhere left to run~ Of course, most people wouldn't consider that a doom, but this is Asch after all...

13th-Feb-2007 04:23 pm (UTC) - (you made Asch smile!)
*colours and beams brilliantly* Thank you so much! *grin* I don't suppose I need to say that you liking this means the world to me, but knowing that it cheered you up means even more. You make me want to go off and radiate fanart at you. *grin*

I actually love that you know what to look for, and you find even more! ♥

Poor Guy, if he think he's got it bad now, just wait until Asch really gets ahold of Luke and teaches him a thing or two
XDD!!! I leave that in your capable hands (and imagination!) XD Trust you to think of that angle! *wild approval* >D

You know that deep down inside, Asch really welcomes it. He just won't be honest with himself. >D

[By the way, congratulations on Level 70! *grin* That was fast!]
13th-Feb-2007 04:40 pm (UTC) - Re: (you made Asch smile!)
♥ Oh yes, it did! Like a little light switch going on. ^^; I've been pretty disgustingly sick over the past few days and doing my best not to gift my flist with my emo over it along with the icky details. And, of course, Valentine's is almost here so I've been attempting to write something HAHA attempting and then you show up with this... and really, reading this wonderful little fic really helped my mood more than I can possibly express. :3 ♥ I think I'll try finishing that damn fic after I get some sleep. I feel inspired now!

Asch makes it real easy to find stuff. *evil laugh*

You've got to admit, a determined Asch and a not quite so clueless anymore Luke are a pretty dangerous combination. ;) Poor Guy won't know what hit him.

Asch? Be honest with himself? Perish the thought.

[Not as fast as some of my guild mates! But I did pretty good regardless. :D All for my pretty gryphon~ I'm such a sucker for pretty pixels. :x]
13th-Feb-2007 05:53 pm (UTC) - ...I suddenly imagined those Siamese cats as our favourite redheads.
! *beams and radiates happy at you for the light switch!* But I'm so sorry to hear you've been so ill. *snug* I don't suppose the weather is helping, is it? [But remember that if you ever need to vent or talk or anything, we're there.]

Your attempts seem far better than what most ordinary writers can manage! I wish you all the best on the new story, and I'm happy for the inspiration! *grin* It's all good! I think writing is a collective/cumulative thing - it's fun to bounce ideas or just be collectively creative. ;) Do get as much rest as you can. I hope you're feeling better soon.

XDDD Asch makes it EASY, period (maybe!). HEHEHEH. He's just so fun to abuse/torture/torment sometimes. But it's all for his own good, really, and we'll make sure he's happy in the end!

I really like it when you write not so clueless Luke. *evil grin* Your Luke is quite delightful.

We can live in hope! XD

[Pretty darn good! *grin* I have a very rough idea of how long it takes to get up to 67 from 65, and all the way up to 70 is amazing. Then again, if it were me, I wouldn't want to rush - what else would there be to aim for, after that? xD

It is so awful that when I think gryphons the first word that comes to mind is ganking. Certain words in conjunction with WOW turn on connections in my head. *grin*

We're all suckers for the pretty! >D We should embrace it! Heheheh. ]
13th-Feb-2007 11:24 pm (UTC) - icon love! :D
I have been staring at your icon for a while now. ♥

We are siamese if you please.. tum tum tum. xD I LOVED this movie so much as a child. Mother says I could watch it 3 times a day, every day a week for MONTHS but I do not remember. xD
13th-Feb-2007 04:19 pm (UTC)

And you wrote this one hour?!

My dear, you need to write more. *hugs* ♥

This time, there is something gentle even in the strength of the hands that pin Guy’s wrists to his sides. “And this,” says Luke, with an emotion Guy cannot at first identify, “Is so that you remember this – ” And Guy cannot understand why it is that Luke has come so close, right up until the moment Luke kisses him.

It is over in a heartbeat, and then intent green eyes meet Guy’s.

“And remember me.”



(admittedly, he probably didn't look like a cockroach head at that point of time because he was in Luke's body but you know what I mean...)

OMG. But this was just... wow. How did Bya-buns and pink fluffy bunnies manage to inspire you to do this?

I promise a comment that's a lot more coherent than this when I'm 1. at home 2. not hungry 3. not thinking of pink bunnies. But for the moment, ♥
13th-Feb-2007 04:32 pm (UTC) - *showers you with sparkling sakura petals and usagi chans*
How did Bya-buns and pink fluffy bunnies manage to inspire you to do this?
XDDD!!! I don't know! XDD Clearly you need to show me more cracked-up videos! XDD I think it was my viewing of that video that initiated a deep systemic instability that culminated in my being able to write something for a pairing which on an ordinary day I view with the same cheerful happy as Murata/Wolfram.

Heheheh - I think the vague idea was percolating in my head for the better part of eight hours, but it wasn't until the last two hours that it actually took the shape you see here. xDD

*giggles helplessly* Thank you so much! I'm just - unbelievably glad you liked it this much!

!!! Thank you! To tell the truth I was actually worried about that scene. I'm most pleasantly surprised that you liked it! XDDDD

!!! Thank you so much! I'm just radiating joy at the screen now! What SERIOUSLY makes me XDDDDD is that ... I made you like That Person?! for some mysterious and unknown reason this isn't the first time - I've been told before that I make people like Asch, which... confuses me.

!!!! You're hungry!! *snugs* ... NiiSAN. D< Are you starving yourself in the library again? I wish I was there to post emergency rations of buns from that Chinese bakery in Leicester Square to you. You still write fabulously coherent comments when thinking of pink bunnies. xD
14th-Feb-2007 01:04 am (UTC) - Re: *showers you with sparkling sakura petals and usagi chans*
If this is what cracked-up videos make you'll do I'll gladly look for more!

I think I've got a soft spot for that sort of scenes... it's the intensity of it I think - it's intense but yet manages to grab your heart and make you go "awww..." somewhere really really deep inside.

And I think it sort of reminds me of S x C for some reason? As in I can actually see them in a scene like that, which makes it all the better.

Although, I'll have to admit, when I started reading this, the first thought that hit was "Gailardia Galan Galudios?" What sort of a name is that? It's like a tongue twister. His parents probably thought, "Son, your name will lead you to your one true match. He who can say it continuously twenty time without tripping up."

I think I liked your Asch because there was a strength and protective streak to him - and one of the sweetest things was that even though he does have feelings for Guy he still puts Luke first? Which is incredibly sweet. And I think that's what you do with Asch - you make him more than a cockroach head with a stick up his butt, at the end of the day, he's a caring, protective brother too but he's just too emotionally closed off to be able to show it. And too damned snarky for his own good too.

Sort of... hm. A little like Byakuya really.

But yes, you should definitely post more. *nods nods*

Hee. I was at the office actually - I just managed to read and reply before anyone realised I was slacking off. ^^

Emergency rations of buns. Dammit. I shouldn't have called Byakuya that. Now even buns give me wrong thoughts.
13th-Feb-2007 04:34 pm (UTC)
13th-Feb-2007 05:05 pm (UTC) - EMITS. A . WORLD . OF . HEARTS . AT . YOU .
♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

OH. MY. HEAVENS - Thank you so much! I - wh - what have I done to deserve this, this was beautiful! Thank you so much - *ON FIRE WITH HAPPY* - thank you! I love your choice of colours - just that choice alone does everything to capture the setting of the story and how it happens in my imagination. And I love the style! It's pure stark beauty - I love how this one image can say so much. LITERALLY, your picture is worth my thousand words - AND MORE. You've got me with my hand over my mouth going I can't believe this ♥ in the best possible way. I love that you drew Luke/Asch with that knowing smirk and that way his mouth tilts upwards. I love the way you draw Guy's eyes! Thank you thank you so much - this is priceless. You've made my yesterday and my today and my whole entire week and my EVERYTHING. ♥
13th-Feb-2007 04:56 pm (UTC)
While you were posting this, I was writing another request XD Seems like this is a productive time.

As usual, your style is so commanding of the readers. So different from my detached, narratvie style XD

I like the how they go three way - how Asch saves Luke's life in his own way and creeping Guy out XD Asch is SO protective of Luke...is it the way you'd like it to be? The way he scares Guy is perfect horror movie material actually. Asch, your sense of V-day is so twisted.
13th-Feb-2007 05:23 pm (UTC)
Heheh. I can blame this on my law website locking us all out and depriving me of my cases - and giving me a legitimate reason not to do homework. I become unstable when unable to do my homework.

Why thank you! I tend to view commanding as a good thing (ha, style semes readers), but if it feels like I'm ordering readers to feel a certain way... [I just want to order SUBTLY. >D]

I've always wondered about whether a writer's style reflects their personality. And what components of style: emotion? Stylistic technique? And when I talk to other writers, we generally think yes.

>D I'm glad you saw that! This story actually started out intending to be an Asch-saves-Luke story, and Asch hit on Guy in the middle of it. In the first draft I generally write my reactions at the appropriate moments, and when Asch did that I wrote (SMACK, BAD BOY) next to the paragraph.

Asch is SO protective of Luke...
Haha you noticed! And yes. The Asch I love best is the one that is very protective of Luke. Sorry, Asch, you're ... rather OOC in this. I've just always liked the thought of Asch watching over Luke from afar, making sure that nothing happens to him, and keeping him safe in every way he can. Technically this story is canonically impossible if you consider the fonslot seal/block as being absolute, but I worked my way around it in my head (it was too unwieldy to fit into the story). I've written story/drabbles based on the fon slot seal never happening and Asch being able to communicate with little Luke - for a time, at least, until Vaan found out and put a stop to that.

The way he scares Guy is perfect horror movie material actually.
*BURSTS OUT LAUGHING* I never even thought of that! Now I have this image of Asch as Sadako in my head! Thanks for this one!

Asch is being sweet on Guy, really: "Happy Valentine's Day. Have me, and the other me, too."
13th-Feb-2007 05:52 pm (UTC)
You are ofiicially at least 5x more workaholic than I am. XD

Does that mean my writing style is uke to the reader? (NO WAY JOSE) O_o I prefer to leave it open for the reader to decide what they want to feel with it. Randomly, I wonder if we can write an Abyss fic Sophocles-style, complete with Chorus dictating the audience as to what to feel XD

Writing style also determines mindset and what the writers value - especially with older writers? For example, I value ambiguity and have a preference for the fic to go around a general word/theme/topic so it reflects in what I write - because I aim for that, whether I hit it or not. From your fic, you have a preference for impactful lines, commanding tones, and putting it as close into the minds of readers as possible by putting them into the characters. IMHO.

Yep, can see huge personality/value differences between us. XD

Sadako Asch. Perfectly plausible when we have Pond-Creature Luke from the Yuria-city anthology comic XD Guy will keep having that >A< (upside down A?) look all the time XD
13th-Feb-2007 06:16 pm (UTC)
EHEHEHEH, not really. I was just D< because my lecture got cancelled today. I hate lectures being cancelled.

When you said chorus dictating to audience, THIS turned up in my head:

Two nations, both alike in dignity
In fair Kimlasca, where we set our scene
Where forbidden artes break to new fomicry
Where Gardios blood makes Fabre hands unclean.

The opening chorus lines of that play are the only ones I can quote verbatim without reference.

I shall be, you know, spectacularly evil, and say that I think all writing styles are uke to the reader, because in the end it is the reader who decides what to make of them. The writer may suggest and think to convey certain thoughts or moods or emotions, but the final arbiter of his/her/its success is the reader. But, like you said, it’s what the writer intended, whether it succeeds or not.

I think ambiguity has its place – although I prefer very precise double meanings rather than actual ambiguity. My kind of ambiguity is the situation when I want the reader to see it both ways.

What I value in Abyss fanfic? … heh, it’s quite simple. Asch happy, one way or the other. As much as I constantly profess my D< for him, I do very much want to see him happy, and it’s quite possible to read 80% of everything I’ve ever written for Abyss as written for that purpose.

I have always thought that your stories were plot-centric as opposed to mine, which seem (comparatively) emotion-centric. If you took five hundred words of a story I wrote and five hundred of one you wrote, there’d be much more happening in yours than mine, action-wise. Writing fanfiction has already done so much to cure my tendency towards authorial narration without action. I will think about what you have said more, for it is fascinating!

Asch-Luke Korean horror films suddenly seem so much more plausible now.
13th-Feb-2007 07:21 pm (UTC)
I looked hard (well, not really) for that Asch/Luke-ness, and found it. And me like, me like.

This is great stuff. I loved it. I was actually sitting here trying to figure out if it really was Luke or Asch. but then figured out it was Asch talking through Luke and... yeah.

I like, I like. <333
13th-Feb-2007 09:02 pm (UTC)

13th-Feb-2007 09:19 pm (UTC)
chris has liked ToA for ages now!
XD crazy it's still going! haha
13th-Feb-2007 09:19 pm (UTC)
After that intro I was expecting Super Bunnyman Guy stealing through the night and then WOW SCARY ASCH DETAAAAAAA

This is really good! &hearts I can easily imagine this scenario occuring in canon (although it's a bit AU) and it makes me wonder if Asch ever used his control over Luke before the game started. Guy must tiptoe around Luke after this. And Guy's mood reminds me of this one online comic (the site closed down or I'd link it D: ) where Guy takes care of Luke, who starts crying and Guy says to himself "Don't worry, I'll make sure to kill you".

I'm wondering about Asch threatening to take revenge for Luke though... Just kind of curious about his motivations there. Because he wants revenge for being forgotten? Because Luke getting assassinated would spoil Van's plans? For his own reasons? It's very interesting!

And the writing is very good too! I liked "sleep-tangled chaos of scarlet hair" a lot. :)
13th-Feb-2007 11:28 pm (UTC)
This was totally awesome! Asch totally OWNED Guy and it was AMAZING! Really, I love how Guy thinks Luke is all harmless and too feeble to do anything like that to him. And the kiss...! Guy was so shocked (oh, I think he liked it...maybe he wanted more?). XDD

>> “Did I have another headache?” asks Luke, as he rubs his eyes, still seemingly sleepy.

“… I think it was a nightmare,” Guy says

But this line was so amazing. I love how it implies that Guy was completely freaked out. XD

>> “But know this. What you do to him, you do also to me. And if you lay a hand on him, I will come for you. And I will do whatever it takes, for however long it takes, until I get to you. Surely you understand, Guy. And when I find you, what I will do to you will make you realise that what happened to your family was mercy before I am through with you.”

And I love how creepy that line sounded. Sent chills down my spine. o.o;;

You write so well, you really should write more! I really enjoyed this, thank you for sharing! :D

Also, raethes's art is so amazing, it really captures the scene well. :O
14th-Feb-2007 12:08 am (UTC)
That was SO AMAZING♥!!!

What a fantastic idea. Guy/Luke and Asch/Luke if you look reaaally hard. - I LOOKED HARD AND AWWW, ASCH IS GETTING SENTIMENTAL♥ He likes his dreck not murdered.

Your writing is just...so good. I'm jealous♥

14th-Feb-2007 01:14 am (UTC) - ahaha appropriate top-pic to match as i comment!
I LOVE YOU ♥ but you knew that already.

This was wonderful!

“And remember me.”
Oh, Asch. *sadfaces*
14th-Feb-2007 03:21 am (UTC)
*showers you with luff*
X3333 A fic with all the pairings I'm starting to like!
Guy's real name is sure a mouthful >__<;
*still working hard on the game* XDDD

Guy teaching Luke how to walk and talk gives way to very very very cute imagery T^T
14th-Feb-2007 01:11 pm (UTC)
WHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! I'm glad to have inspired fic =DDDDDDDDDDDDD Writing = good. =D The creepy personality (or person? =D) switching was really nicely done. Poor Guy, getting freaked out like that. (Though he did bring it on himself XD) Luke is such a kid. =D

15th-Feb-2007 12:44 am (UTC)
Nice!! =O Thanks so much for sharing! (Sorry for the incoherency, but that's all I have time for now.)
15th-Feb-2007 02:24 am (UTC) - You made me a VERY HAPPY ASCHXGUY fan~!XDXDXD
*rips youtube vid* As soon as I read Okiayu Ryoutarou-- I knew I needed to look at it cause he's my twin bro's favorite seiyuu.<3 I can't help but grin at this... I need more crack... Thankies for putting up the link~!

And about the fic. I really wanted to draw something in an instant but you know I don't have a tablet.ID I know it's really late but-- Asch kissing Guy is just *hearts* art it's not good as raethes' art tho...^^;; *shoots self*

I can read the AschXLuke overprotectiveness thing in this, but-- a fatherly!Guy to Luke is good enough for me.^^;; I'm sorry I really can't take the pairing GuyXLuke.

There were other people who inspired you to make this fic? I wonder who're they? I haven't been that active with AschXGuy lately and been trying to finish my Kaizer!Guy parallel... (Hey, AschXGuy is still my most favorite ToA pairing!)

People should write more nice AschXGuy ficcies...
23rd-Feb-2007 03:24 am (UTC)
*random stranger attack!*

Forgive the invasion! Through quite a bit of wandering - hunting for decent ToA fanfiction which is not an easy task, apparently - I stumbled here and discovered I like what I see. (I have become such a fan of Guy. Fie upon him for stealing my heart.) You write him so beautifully, ;__;

Rambling aside, I was wondering if I could friend you? ^^

(Also, may I just take a moment to note that your LJ design made me laugh out loud in a public college library. Thanks. >___>;)
23rd-Feb-2007 07:28 am (UTC) - Why hello there! *grin*
*beams* Why hello there! ;) Feel free to friend away, I'm always happy to meet new people into Abyss! Especially if they write as well as you! I wandered by your journal after reading this and - you write excellent Guy and young!Luke work! I do believe I need to leave you a more thorough comment soon - but I've been waiting forever for someone to write Guy/Luke like you. *grin*

Heh - thank you so much! *smiles* I'm always terribly nervous about my own writing, so it's always great to hear that I wasn't as bad as I feared ;) By the way, you write wonderfully, and I'm looking forward to more from you. *grin*

And you like Zack-Cloud-Sephiroth too! ;) Nice! I wonder if you read chibirisuchan - she got me to like the whole Sephiroth and Cloud and Zack thing in the first place.

I'm not sure if this helps, but I wrote up two Abyss fanfiction link-posts here - I feel your pain! The first one I wrote was just a list of all the Abyss fanfiction ever written at that point in time, although there's more now. *grin* I hope you find something you like. My favourite writer is narugami for this story (spoiler, endgame).
23rd-Feb-2007 08:15 am (UTC) - Re: Why hello there! *grin*
Aww, yay! xD I have to say it's a bit of a relief. I've only gotten opinions from fairness thus far, and while I totally respect her opinion, I like hearing that I'm doing okay from other perspectives.

There'll be more on the way as I get further in the game, if you're interested. *shameless future plug* They've got me very intrigued, and I tend to latch on to characters and fill in those mysterious blanks of past lives... *cough* I think it's the fate of all decent authors to question their works. Kind of unfair, but part of life.

Eh-heh, you too? Fans of the threesome of SOLDIER-doom are few and far between. Though admittedly I've never actually written the three of them together. (My OTP of Final Fantasy VII is actually Zack/Aerith, but my Zack/Cloud-muse doth protest...) I haven't read chibirisuchan's fics, but I may just have to add that to my list of things to do this week. It is reading week for me, after all, and I for some reason have no homework, o.o So fanfiction it is!

That helps a lot, thank you! I have found a few of those, but certainly not all. chibimazoku's fic about Guy getting his collar is actually what inspired me to start writing young!Luke and Guy ficbites. I'll have to comb through those fics and click carefully - I haven't beaten the game yet and I've been trying so hard to avoid spoilers. Thank you for the warning, by the way! I imagine I'll become a reading fiend once I finally finish. Which will hopefully be this week...

Rambling again. -_-; Thanks again! I can't wait to see what you come up with next, ^_^
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